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::The changes to the first paragraph were discussed here [[Talk:Electronic_cigarette#Proposed_changes_to_the_lead]] thus the removal of "do not contain [[tobacco]], although they do use [[nicotine]] from tobacco plants" [[User:Doc James|'''Doc James''']] ([[User talk:Doc James|talk]] · [[Special:Contributions/Doc James|contribs]] · [[Special:EmailUser/Doc James|email]]) 10:33, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

::: Didn't spot that change contained the removal of the tobacco note. Noted and struck. [[User:SPACKlick|SPACKlick]] ([[User talk:SPACKlick|talk]]) 10:36, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

*I think the actual problem we have here is methodological. I think the editing process at work is:- (1) Find a source; (2) Paraphrase it closely and cite it carefully; (3) Stick it in the article; and then (4) Group the sentences that seem to be related. It leads to paragraphs that are at once choppily-phrased and convoluted in meaning. In the lede, it also leads to inappropriately-high levels of technical detail on one key idea before other simple, key ideas are mentioned.—[[User:S Marshall|'''S Marshall''']] [[User talk:S Marshall|T]]/[[Special:Contributions/S Marshall|C]] 12:05, 1 April 2015 (UTC)

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