Talk:All Hell Breaks Loose (Charmed) - Wikipedia

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Resurrection from being a redirect or disambig page occurred as this article meets criteria for notability in that it marks the end of an important era in this television show, where the cast underwent a major upheaval and the production philosophy of the show changed dramatically, in that after the departure of Shannen Doherty, new plots presented the new Charmed Ones trio as being much more equal in witch powers and that balm to actors, face time and dialog lines for the last five years of the series were much more fair and balanced. // FrankB 01:44, 20 January 2009 (UTC)Reply

1. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=27hVYsC_kcc&t=59s
2. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jm4W32qJAgc

1. https://open.spotify.com/episode/79GoZUYLP6xSJ2OezBJbgf?si=n3gXyqWDRBOnCqiEW7buNA&nd=1&dlsi=ace9f7b3ddf94137
2. https://tvline.com/gallery/charmed-anniversary-photos-biggest-moments-prue-death-phoebe-cole/charmed-season-3-finale/

1. https://www.syfy.com/syfy-wire/why-did-shannen-doherty-really-leave-the-original-charmed

This review is transcluded from Talk:All Hell Breaks Loose (Charmed)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Nominator: PanagiotisZois (talk · contribs) 20:33, 29 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: FishLoveHam (talk · contribs) 20:23, 4 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

Hi! I'll conduct this review   FishLoveHam (talk) 20:23, 4 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

• "The episode was originally broadcast in the United States on May 17, 2001, on The WB. Written by Brad Kern and directed by Shannen Doherty, "All Hell Breaks Loose" originally aired on The WB on May 17, 2001." Why is this information repeated?
• "of all time" sounds a little in-universe-y, maybe try "the show's most powerful witches" or something.
  • Still in-universe. FishLoveHam (talk) 14:21, 9 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
• "coming out into the public" clunky, reword.
• Remove the comma before "...when Prue and Piper are caught..." and replace "when" with "after".
  • The comma hasn't been removed FishLoveHam (talk) 14:21, 9 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
• "among" → "one of".

• This plot section is very long for a TV episode, at over 800 words. Wikipedia suggests no more than 400 words for a singular television episode.
  • It's now better, but still crosses over 560 words. FishLoveHam (talk) 14:27, 9 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
• "personal assassin" → "assassin"
• "find out more information" → "learn more"
• "vanquishing spell" → "a vanquishing spell".
• "At the news station, Elana (Mercedes Colón) shows her crew the footage Prue and Piper vanquishing Shax" missing "of".
• "He arrives at the manor, and tells them they could be arrested because they killed someone on live television." remove comma.
• "to figure out where Shax went" → "in search of Shax".
• "blows him up" reads informally.
  • I changed that, but I'm wondering if maybe I should add a note that Piper has the power of molecular combustion.--PanagiotisZois (talk) 15:07, 8 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
    • I don't think it's necessary. FishLoveHam (talk) 15:22, 8 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
• "Back at the manor" Remove, the previous sentence establishes they are there.
• Introduce Cole.
  • I wasn't sure if simply adding "half-demon boyfriend" is enough.
    • I meant his actor in brackets, you don't need to say he's half-demon. FishLoveHam (talk) 15:20, 8 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
• "come after him" → "follow him".
• "wo secretly tells his hit-man" → "who secretly tells his hit-man".
• "the point" → "when".
• Remove the comma after "window".

• Remove the comma after "who attacks them".
• "Phoebe finds Cole and asks him to come back to the manor"; "come back" → "return".
• Remove "named".
• "Cole's help in getting"; remove "in".
• "Cole ask the Source"; "ask" → "asks".
• "under the condition Phoebe join the dark side"; "condition Phoebe join" → "condition of Phoebe joining"

• Change the quote from "the rough cut for" to "the rough cut" for.
• "when" → "after".
• "lived" → "lives".
• "kill-off" → "kill off" (same with image caption)
• "gave everyone options about what they were or were not going to do" explain this a bit more.
• "not left" → "remained on".
• "in a different manner" → "differently".

@FishLoveHam: In the TV Line source, the following is described:

"Season 3's Kern-penned finale, which ended with all three sisters in mortal danger, "gave everyone options about what they were or were not going to do", he explains. "As an executive producer, my job was to put out a compelling finale. So the cliffhanger ending that would eventually launch us into our fourth season was something I'd been planning on doing no matter what. If the network were to say 'You're keeping your entire cast', I simply would have written a way out of it in Season 4."

Admittedly, Kern doesn't exactly say in this section of the source that the Doherty-Milano feud is what resulted in Doherty's departure and Prue's death. I guess when he says that a cliffhanger ending "gave everyone options about what they were or were not going to do", he was most likely referring to the actresses and/or producers. That whether the Charmed actresses chose to leave or stay, or whether the show's producers took it upon themselves to keep all three of them or fire one of them—which they did—all outcomes could be accomodated by this episode's ending.--PanagiotisZois (talk) 15:16, 8 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

Can't this be explained in the article itself? FishLoveHam (talk) 15:27, 8 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

• "prime time" → "prime-time".
• "time period" → "period" or "time".

• Neither of these have been addressed. FishLoveHam (talk) 14:31, 9 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

• Ref 1 says "pp. 152–53" change to "pp. 152–153" for clarity.
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Thank you so much for picking up this review @FishLoveHam:! I'll try to address your comments as quickly as I can, but it might take me a couple of days.--PanagiotisZois (talk) 17:40, 5 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

No problem, take your time! :) FishLoveHam (talk) 17:52, 5 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

Hey @FishLoveHam:. I've made revision to the article. I've added one more source and some content, changed the infobox image, reworked the second-last sentence from the "Production" section, and trimmed down the plot synopsis. PanagiotisZois (talk) 14:04, 9 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

The new infobox image's caption is quite long, can it be trimmed? FishLoveHam (talk) 22:00, 9 October 2024 (UTC)Reply